Monday, November 2, 2009
More Paper Problems
I have been having a hard time focusing my paper. I realized that I have not been using my thesis statement as a guide to write my paper. I actually never included my thesis into my paper, which I think has been giving me a lot of problems. Also, I did not describe what an active is early enough in my paper, which caused my paper to be confusing. I moved this statement from the end of the first page to the first paragraph: "An active is a programmable human who can receive different personalities in order to do whatever a client wishes." I think this will help people know what I am talking about, but I need to explain more of the background of Dollhouse so people can follow what I say
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I think that you might benefit from summarizing the entire premise of the show in your first paragraph, hinting and what part of the show connects with your thesis statement, and then stating your thesis at the end of the 1st paragraph. That's kind of how I did mine and I find it to be very helpful!
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